Pitch feedback: overall

I already spoke about what I need to do individually to improve my part of the pitch.

http://titles14group21.blogspot.co.uk/2014/02/pitch-feedback-improvement.html

In general, we got some feedback for our pitch, which consisted of:

- emphasizing the use of mise-en-scene in our opening. This is because it is easier to identify what character is what. There is a possibility that because we are doing a teen movie, mise-en-scene may be seen as not as important, but it is. It was advised that if we have good and clear mise-en-scene, it will make the opening much stronger.

- we were also told that our storyline was unnecessarily complicated. In the pitch, it showed that our teen opening was inspired by this film:

This is because our film revolves around a summer camp as this one. However, we were told that the storyline did not need to be elaborate, as we're only doing the opening and the other elements will not be shown, so did not need to be detailed. We were told to revert to our original idea, of students travelling and arriving, but not necessarily the whole camp idea.

We will use this feedback to improve our general idea.